In the blog post section I I'm going to be making a found poem in the sub genre free-form excerpting and remixing. The work I'm making this found poem out of is my narrative project draft 1. My goal for this found poem is for it to be at least 100 words and to follow the same storyline as my narrative project. In the section II of this blog post I'm going to be answering some questions related to my narrative project and this found poem.
Section I found poem I don't have the patience An option, a small window and lack of light to breath to call, to tell, to keep that promise ding, ding, ding my heart beats excruciating, don't get too concerned there was nothing there were options what options to wait, to shift, to pressure on your lungs beware no I’ll have it, I'll do it, the surgery I don't have the patience I should have waited I should have the patience waiting was overwhelming the feeling of blood this feeling some patients have how was I supposed to concentrate work, school, boss, advisor I should have waited. I should have waited till the summer. Section II Do you think the narrative provides enough descriptive language to create a compelling found poem? Yes I feel that my narrative project had enough description language to create a found poem but more description would not have hurt. Do you think the descriptive language more so creates a setting or delivers the subtext of a theme? I think for the first scene in my narrative project the descriptive language delivered more of a theme but in the second scene of my narrative project the descriptive language created more of a setting In revision, will you focus on using description to develop more of the setting or more of a theme? In revising I'll probably focus on using description to develop more of the setting
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Sabatino
10/19/2018 11:11:25 am
This reads like a poem. I appreciate the choices you made in terms of line breaks and excerpts of language to represent the conflict of the narrative.
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coleman clark
10/22/2018 02:28:55 pm
I liked the way that you were able to capture a type of panic in the poem. The way that you split the lines and positioned the words really made this read well. nice job
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Soumiya
10/22/2018 05:52:58 pm
That must've been a big decision to make. I hope everything turned out okay. This peace can be related with anyone who is a rush and/or sacrificing something for the greater good. I liked your poem and I also hope that everything turned out okay.
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